#162 Gargleblaster

Follow the Devil’s Backbone, she says, pointing to the trail.  Pine tree roots form the vertebrae.  The devil has scoliosis, curved, up to the neck of the ridge.  There you will see the valley, the palm of God’s hand.  Biblical, this land.

 

39 Comments #162 Gargleblaster

  1. Jennifer G. Knoblock May 19, 2014 at 10:22 am

    I love the rhythm of this, so poetic.

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:26 pm

      Thank you, Jennifer! I appreciate your kind comment.

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:28 pm

      Thank you! I loved your piece. My dad was a pilot and aviation safety expert…situational awareness was a term I heard often.

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      1. jetgirlcos May 20, 2014 at 7:57 am

        Awesome! It rarely occurs to me that it’s not a common term 🙂

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  2. Sue May 19, 2014 at 11:17 am

    Love it – so creative

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:28 pm

      Thank you, Sue!

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  3. theinnerzone May 19, 2014 at 11:50 am

    very evocative and creative – Pine tree roots form the vertebrae

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:29 pm

      Thank you — so glad you enjoyed it!

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  4. M. L. Sexton May 19, 2014 at 12:11 pm

    Yes! I loved this. So beautiful. “There you will see the valley, the palm of God’s hand”

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:29 pm

      Thanks so much, M.L. Appreciate your kind words!

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  5. jenbrunett May 19, 2014 at 1:20 pm

    I love the imagery you used here. Awesome!

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:30 pm

      Thank you, Jen, for reading and commenting!

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  6. Marcy May 19, 2014 at 5:26 pm

    I liked this. It seemed like such a real place to me, but I see that it’s tagged microfiction.

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:32 pm

      It is *sort of* a real place. I was walking along a trail and thought it seemed like the devil’s backbone, but I think the name was something bland like, “Pine Tree Trail.” And it didn’t really open up to a valley, but another part of the trail did. Thanks for reading, Marcy!

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  7. KymmInBarcelona May 19, 2014 at 5:55 pm

    Trekking good and evil! Very cool imagery.

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:33 pm

      Hah! Exactly! Thanks for commenting.

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  8. Christine May 19, 2014 at 6:07 pm

    Gorgeous! What a beautiful description – it makes me want to visit. I love it when prose sounds like poetry, by the way. You did a lovely job. Thanks for linking up with us!

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    1. Meg May 19, 2014 at 10:34 pm

      Thank you for all your work, Christine! I’m becoming a big fan of Yeah Write. Good people, great writing. Appreciate your reading and kind words.

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  9. innatejames May 19, 2014 at 10:46 pm

    I love that you always manage to fold science and geography into your work. So, so delicious, Meg!

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:23 pm

      Thank you, Nate! I hadn’t noticed but you’re right…there is some kind of science and/or geography involved. Wish I had realized when I was in school what a nerd I am. 🙂 I’m really glad you like this.

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      1. innatejames May 20, 2014 at 10:26 pm

        You called it nerdy. I call it passionate!

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  10. Shailaja /Doting Mom May 20, 2014 at 6:14 am

    I am getting an inferiority complex when I read posts like yours! How effortless you’ve made it sound. Poetry in prose. I bow to thee 😀

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:28 pm

      Oh, trust me, it is always hard, at least it is for me. I can noodle over one line for hours. Thank you for your generous comments and for reading it in the first place. Means a lot.

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  11. Archita May 20, 2014 at 12:13 pm

    I loved reading it, Meg. 🙂 Beautiful piece. 🙂

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:29 pm

      Thanks so much, Archita!

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:30 pm

      Thank you, Robbie! Come to Ohio!

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  12. atrm61 May 20, 2014 at 2:24 pm

    Fabulous word wizardry! Love it:-)

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:36 pm

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Atreyee.

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  13. saroful May 20, 2014 at 4:35 pm

    This speaks to me on so many personal levels that I can’t even properly sort my favorite parts or why it works so well. Really lovely.

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 5:37 pm

      I’m so glad it works — I never know! 😉 Really appreciate your kindness.

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    1. Meg May 20, 2014 at 10:24 pm

      Thank you, Kathy!

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  14. ContactRida May 21, 2014 at 1:27 am

    very mystical. love this very visual tale.

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    1. Meg May 21, 2014 at 10:16 am

      Thanks for reading!

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