Poseidon’s Angry Fist

A Mermaid by John William Waterhouse
A Mermaid by John William Waterhouse

I know where you’re going, wrestling with all that gear—oxygen, mask, spear. Not so fast, my finned friend. I shake my fist and the earth rumbles beneath the sea.   Your ship tumbles and turns; the captain steers your dreams to shore.

 

 

30 Comments Poseidon’s Angry Fist

  1. Kir Piccini June 30, 2014 at 8:59 am

    you learn to never mess with the King of the ocean and his treasures.
    Better to stay on land.

    nice write.

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:50 pm

      That’s right, Kir. Never mess with the gods. Thanks for reading.

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  2. glasgowdragonfly June 30, 2014 at 9:13 am

    I like how you stayed true to the traditional mythical mermaid ledgend. You pack a lot of great imagery in your wrath of the gods take. Good work!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:51 pm

      Thanks so much for the read, glasgowdragonfly.

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:51 pm

      You got it, Kathy. Think we’d learn by now! Thanks for commenting.

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  3. tnkerr June 30, 2014 at 11:48 am

    Me and Neptune… we’re close personal friends. You don’t ever want to make him angry. “Hell hath no fury” if you know what I mean?
    Another great one!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:52 pm

      Thanks a bunch, Thom. Glad you liked it.

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  4. innatejames June 30, 2014 at 3:06 pm

    Love how you made the narrator neither captain nor ship. Intriguing why Poseidon would even notice a layman’s intent on stealing his daughters.

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    1. Meg June 30, 2014 at 3:41 pm

      Poseidon is a micro-manager. LOL.

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  5. Jennifer G. Knoblock June 30, 2014 at 3:22 pm

    This is a beautiful sentence: “Your ship tumbles and turns; the captain steers your dreams to shore.” Oh! and gear/spear. And wrestling & rumbles, rumbles/tumbles. You’re a poet, admit it. 🙂

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:53 pm

      No, I’m well aware of my limitations with the wonders of poetry. You, on the other hand, know what you’re doing! Thanks for the kind words, Jennifer.

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  6. blainecindy June 30, 2014 at 5:35 pm

    Oooh, love the imagery you paint. Great job!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:53 pm

      Thanks so much!

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  7. MamaMickTerry June 30, 2014 at 8:17 pm

    I knew I’d find you here with something fabulous!
    Loved this and have been completely sucked in by the prompt and everyone’s take on it. I love the visual yours creates and the words you use are perfect…like always 🙂

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:54 pm

      Thank you, my sweet friend! Glad you participated again — your piece was lovely. <3

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  8. C.C. June 30, 2014 at 10:37 pm

    I love mythology and this take on the prompt…right from the title down to the stunning last line…is beautiful.

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:55 pm

      Awww, thanks, C.C. So happy your found it worthwhile. Thanks for commenting.

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  9. YeshuM July 1, 2014 at 1:44 am

    Always loved Greek mythology. Great take here!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:56 pm

      Thank you, Yeshu!

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  10. thewizardsword July 1, 2014 at 5:34 am

    Karma & Greek Mythology. It doesn’t get any better than this! Good one!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:56 pm

      Thanks so much, Susan!

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  11. KymmInBarcelona July 1, 2014 at 10:12 am

    Gorgeous! Love that last line.

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:56 pm

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Kymm!

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  12. Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver) July 1, 2014 at 11:40 am

    I love the strength of the characterization and of the imagery – a wonderful combination. Well done!!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:57 pm

      Thank you, Jo-Anne. Congrats on your piece. It was great!

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  13. Marcy July 1, 2014 at 2:46 pm

    Definitely can’t mess with Poseidon! You captured his power well.

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 7:58 pm

      Thanks, as always, for your kind words, Marcy!

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    1. Meg July 2, 2014 at 8:24 pm

      Good! Probably a bit arrogant of me to assume the first-person POV with a god, but what the hell? 😉 Thanks, Natalie!

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