My too silent heart

The pain didn’t pound on my chest like a gorilla

It burrowed timidly between

Soft shoulder blades

My heart, greedy for oxygen, could not lift a red flag,

Under each labored breath, it quietly cursed this

Rogue clot, sticky and deadly thick.

21 Comments My too silent heart

  1. Tina December 3, 2014 at 11:05 am

    This was very visceral and kind of scary. I hope that if you actually experienced this, you are feeling better.

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    1. Meg December 4, 2014 at 1:27 am

      Thanks for your kind words, Tina. Yes, actually, six years ago today, I had a heart attack. It’s my angioversary! Back pain is a common symptom for women but a lot of doctors don’t connect the dots. Mine didn’t.

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  2. susanwritesprecise December 3, 2014 at 12:55 pm

    So very evocative. Your descriptions and word choice really took me there. Good writing!

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    1. Meg December 4, 2014 at 1:28 am

      Thanks so much, Susan. Grateful for your generous comments.

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  3. Shannon December 3, 2014 at 8:36 pm

    Ah, the way you described the pain was fantastic, I re-read those first couple lines a couple times. It’s a gritty subject made beautiful.

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    1. Meg December 4, 2014 at 1:29 am

      Greatly appreciate your thoughtful reading, Shannon!

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  4. cynkingfeeling December 3, 2014 at 10:48 pm

    Your personification of the clot, your heart and the pain is amazing. So glad you defied the odds and are around to write this.

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    1. Meg December 4, 2014 at 1:30 am

      Me too, Cyn! It was a big fat angry clot. 😉 Thanks for your sweet comments. xoxo

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  5. Silverleaf December 4, 2014 at 9:40 am

    My dear friend, this is a stunning and even beautiful insight into something which must have been terrifying. Makes me feel even luckier to know you. And what a perfect title. xo

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:34 am

      Awww. Thanks for this sweet comment. I feel lucky to be here and to know you. Big hugs.

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  6. KymmInBarcelona December 4, 2014 at 10:41 am

    I really like how you take this from the (expected) gorilla pounding to the (unexpected) quiet and deadly form it takes on.
    I’m also happy to be able to read you : )

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:36 am

      Thank you, Kymm! Our paths don’t cross much on the boards here at yeah write — seems like we’re always posting in different places — so I’m especially grateful to hear from you.

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  7. Christine December 4, 2014 at 1:45 pm

    Fantastic, Meg. The more I read it, the better I like it. (The writing, not the event!)

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:37 am

      Mwah, Christine. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It was heartfelt. Hah! See what I did there! 😉

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  8. jedwardbenoit December 4, 2014 at 2:10 pm

    I wish big things would announce themselves with loud knocking. Instead it’s these little pin pricks that we ignore until it’s too late. Way to capture that.

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:39 am

      Yeah, I walked around for two weeks essentially having a prolonged heart attack. Amazingly, the muscle was not damaged. I’m a lucky girl. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  9. discontentedoyster December 4, 2014 at 9:51 pm

    writing about illness is a tricky endeavor. you shoot, you score.

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:41 am

      Thanks!

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  10. Nate December 4, 2014 at 10:25 pm

    Happy Angioversary! I felt this in the pit of my stomach because I knew it was autobiographical. I love how you ended it. We never anticipate our (potential) killers to be within.

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    1. Meg December 12, 2014 at 12:42 am

      Thanks, Nate! Happy to still be here. Glad you liked this. It was a subtle response to the prompt. Just barely squeaked in.

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