Tenderfoot

The commuters side-stepped his outstretched legs, the purple socks in ratty slippers, the grease-stained pants from Goodwill. He stopped apologizing for his limbs that would not bend. Each day, he sat at the station, counting scowls. Each day, alone, she said, “Hello.”


6 Comments Tenderfoot

  1. Silverleaf April 21, 2016 at 12:29 am

    Aw, so achingly sweet and sad. And a perfect title as it’s so tenderly written. The little details really bring his character to life and build sympathy. The purple socks especially stayed with me.

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  2. d3athlily April 21, 2016 at 8:12 am

    Wow. You painted such a great picture with perfect words and emotions. I pitied him instantly.

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  3. Kalpana Solsi April 21, 2016 at 11:29 am

    After series of scowls , a caring hello must have warmed his heart. I could see the picture in front of my eyes.

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  4. theinnerzone April 21, 2016 at 3:00 pm

    Vivid with details. All show and no tell. The best I’ve read on the grid so far.

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  5. innatejames April 21, 2016 at 9:50 pm

    “Counting scowls” adds so much to the man’s personality.

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  6. prettyflyforawhitemom May 2, 2016 at 2:57 pm

    That was really neat.. You pull the reader in and then I’m left wanting more.. A really cool reading experience

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