Follow the Devil’s Backbone, she says, pointing to the trail. Pine tree roots form the vertebrae. The devil has scoliosis, curved, up to the neck of the ridge. There you will see the valley, the palm of God’s hand. Biblical, this land.
you may ask yourself, well, how did i get here
I love the rhythm of this, so poetic.
Thank you, Jennifer! I appreciate your kind comment.
Thank you! I loved your piece. My dad was a pilot and aviation safety expert…situational awareness was a term I heard often.
Awesome! It rarely occurs to me that it’s not a common term 🙂
Love it – so creative
Thank you, Sue!
very evocative and creative – Pine tree roots form the vertebrae
Thank you — so glad you enjoyed it!
Yes! I loved this. So beautiful. “There you will see the valley, the palm of God’s hand”
Thanks so much, M.L. Appreciate your kind words!
I love the imagery you used here. Awesome!
Thank you, Jen, for reading and commenting!
I liked this. It seemed like such a real place to me, but I see that it’s tagged microfiction.
It is *sort of* a real place. I was walking along a trail and thought it seemed like the devil’s backbone, but I think the name was something bland like, “Pine Tree Trail.” And it didn’t really open up to a valley, but another part of the trail did. Thanks for reading, Marcy!
Trekking good and evil! Very cool imagery.
Hah! Exactly! Thanks for commenting.
Gorgeous! What a beautiful description – it makes me want to visit. I love it when prose sounds like poetry, by the way. You did a lovely job. Thanks for linking up with us!
Thank you for all your work, Christine! I’m becoming a big fan of Yeah Write. Good people, great writing. Appreciate your reading and kind words.
I love that you always manage to fold science and geography into your work. So, so delicious, Meg!
Thank you, Nate! I hadn’t noticed but you’re right…there is some kind of science and/or geography involved. Wish I had realized when I was in school what a nerd I am. 🙂 I’m really glad you like this.
You called it nerdy. I call it passionate!
I am getting an inferiority complex when I read posts like yours! How effortless you’ve made it sound. Poetry in prose. I bow to thee 😀
Oh, trust me, it is always hard, at least it is for me. I can noodle over one line for hours. Thank you for your generous comments and for reading it in the first place. Means a lot.
I loved reading it, Meg. 🙂 Beautiful piece. 🙂
Thanks so much, Archita!
breathtakingly beautiful. I want to go there NOW!
Thank you, Robbie! Come to Ohio!
Fabulous word wizardry! Love it:-)
Thanks for reading and commenting, Atreyee.
This speaks to me on so many personal levels that I can’t even properly sort my favorite parts or why it works so well. Really lovely.
I’m so glad it works — I never know! 😉 Really appreciate your kindness.
Very poetic! This is brilliant. ♥
Thank you, Kathy!
very mystical. love this very visual tale.
Thanks for reading!
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