I know where you’re going, wrestling with all that gear—oxygen, mask, spear. Not so fast, my finned friend. I shake my fist and the earth rumbles beneath the sea. Your ship tumbles and turns; the captain steers your dreams to shore.
Poseidon’s Angry Fist
you learn to never mess with the King of the ocean and his treasures.
Better to stay on land.
nice write.
That’s right, Kir. Never mess with the gods. Thanks for reading.
I like how you stayed true to the traditional mythical mermaid ledgend. You pack a lot of great imagery in your wrath of the gods take. Good work!
Thanks so much for the read, glasgowdragonfly.
That will teach them to go hunting mermaids! Nothing like the wrath of the Gods.
You got it, Kathy. Think we’d learn by now! Thanks for commenting.
Me and Neptune… we’re close personal friends. You don’t ever want to make him angry. “Hell hath no fury” if you know what I mean?
Another great one!
Thanks a bunch, Thom. Glad you liked it.
Love how you made the narrator neither captain nor ship. Intriguing why Poseidon would even notice a layman’s intent on stealing his daughters.
Poseidon is a micro-manager. LOL.
This is a beautiful sentence: “Your ship tumbles and turns; the captain steers your dreams to shore.” Oh! and gear/spear. And wrestling & rumbles, rumbles/tumbles. You’re a poet, admit it. :)
No, I’m well aware of my limitations with the wonders of poetry. You, on the other hand, know what you’re doing! Thanks for the kind words, Jennifer.
Oooh, love the imagery you paint. Great job!
Thanks so much!
I knew I’d find you here with something fabulous!
Loved this and have been completely sucked in by the prompt and everyone’s take on it. I love the visual yours creates and the words you use are perfect…like always :-)
Thank you, my sweet friend! Glad you participated again — your piece was lovely. <3
I love mythology and this take on the prompt…right from the title down to the stunning last line…is beautiful.
Awww, thanks, C.C. So happy your found it worthwhile. Thanks for commenting.
Always loved Greek mythology. Great take here!
Thank you, Yeshu!
Karma & Greek Mythology. It doesn’t get any better than this! Good one!
Thanks so much, Susan!
Gorgeous! Love that last line.
Thanks for reading and commenting, Kymm!
I love the strength of the characterization and of the imagery – a wonderful combination. Well done!!
Thank you, Jo-Anne. Congrats on your piece. It was great!
Definitely can’t mess with Poseidon! You captured his power well.
Thanks, as always, for your kind words, Marcy!
Digging the POV here.
Good! Probably a bit arrogant of me to assume the first-person POV with a god, but what the hell? ;) Thanks, Natalie!